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Saturday, February 9, 2008

The Second Draft

Most of us in the writing community have a way we like to go about our craft. Some writers like to map out their entire story before they even start to write, while others like to let the characters and the story emerge organically, growing almost of their own volition.

But what about the second draft?

While I am not saying that this is the only way to go about revising your work, it is a great place to start. Believe me, I don't care if you're Hemingway, your first draft needs work. We've all heard that most of writing is re-writing, and I am a subscriber to that theory. The first draft is all about blasting out those words and getting the story down. Once that's done, the real work begins.

A story is like a gemstone. I'm sure no one has ever heard that comparison before, but it is a really good way to visualize the process. In the first draft, you have unearthed this rock. It is big and blocky and very organic-looking. The first thing you're going to do is look at the whole thing and see where the heart of the gem lies. You cut away the roughest material until you can see its true form. Once that is done, you rough it into the general shape you want it to take, and finally you polish it and facet it until it glitters like a star. These are the same steps you can take when you begin the revision process.


Step one: Story If you are not an outliner, then once the first draft is finished you should go back and re-read your story and create an outline along the way. Some people suggest putting the manuscript away for anywhere from a week to a month, but that is up to you. The idea is to give yourself "fresh eyes" for your manuscript. This is important because we are so close to our work and know it so intimately that we can't look at it objectively. You need objectivity to honestly evaluate your work, so if you need time away, take it, and when you're ready, pull it back out and get to reading. Once you have a feel for your story as a whole, go back and look over your outline and make sure that everything in the story fits. Ensure that the subplots and characters are there for a reason. A major rewrite may be necessary at this step, and if it is, don't let it intimidate you. Rewriting is good if it is making the story better. Conflict, character, tension and obstacles for your main character to overcome must all be there and must all be necessary to resolve the story. Once you have the story set and you are sure that all the elements fit together you can move on to the next step.


Step Two: Scene Now that you have the story set, it is time to go back through and look at each scene you have created. Look at them with an eye toward cutting. If a scene doesn't need to be there and the story still flows nicely without it, cut it. Sometimes this step will lead you to a major plot revision. If this is the case, then go back to Step One and start all over again. I know that sounds like the worst thing in the world, but it is better than having a bad story. Scenes should begin and end naturally and dialog should be clean and realistic.


Step Three: Sentence Now your are ready to facet and polish your gem. Go through each and every sentence of your book, watching for anything that makes you stop and go back to reread. Watch for excessive adjectives and adverbs, and make sure you have strong verbs. Word conservation is what you should be focusing on here. There should be no unnecessary words in your sentences. Sentence lengths should be varied and provide an easy rhythm. It is a good idea to read your book out loud so that you can hear how it sounds. You will catch a lot of flow and rhythm problems here.

It is at this point that you should feel confident to present your work to a critique group or your beta readers, but don't be surprised if they still find things that you missed. Beta readers are especially valuable in the sense that if several readers point out the same issue, then you can be fairly sure that you have a real problem. Beta readers are going to want to give you input, but remember that it is your story, and if you don't feel like a suggested change then don't make it. Ultimately it is up to you.

This approach is logical to me, as it moves from general down to specific, from the broad stroke of the story to the microscopic sentence structure. Though it is in no way the only method for revision, it's one that many people can use and is easy to keep in your head during the process. There are definite steps and goals to be reached in each step. If you have methods that you prefer, leave a comment and let us know! Keep writing!

Monday, December 31, 2007

QT 2 is Now Live

After two long months of development, QT2 is now up and running. I thought it would take most of the day, but things went smoothly and it was ready by about 9am on December 31st.

Of course, it is far from being done. I will be tweaking and adding things to it for several weeks. I figure I was able to incorporate about two-thirds of the features I wanted to add, so I still have some work ahead of me. If you made a suggestion for a new feature but don't see it, it probably just means I haven't gotten to it yet. If you want to contact me to see if your feature is on the list, please go right ahead.

The first thing most people will likely notice is the new menu system. The original menu became quite cluttered as more and more features were added. This one is cleaner and can grow without getting ugly.

The other thing that stands out almost right away is all the on-screen help. Just put your mouse over any of the yellow question marks to get instant help. Plus, almost any icon also has help attatched, which can be viewed just by placing your mouse over it.

Enjoy and Happy New Year.

Saturday, December 15, 2007

QueryTracker Version 2 Quickly Approaching

With a self-imposed deadline of January 1st, I've been very busy working on the new version of QueryTracker (which explains why I haven't been doing much blogging.) Yesterday I opened up QT2 to a group of beta testers who are giving it a full workout, and even though not all of the components are there, feedback has already been good.

Sadly, I won't have everything done by the deadline, but there is still plenty of new stuff and I am still planning to release everything available on Jan. 1. So, what will be different in QT2? Plenty. Where do I even begin?

  • Greatly expanded search tools for searching for agents, including geographic region, and more.

  • A system of user-definable "folders" so you can organize agents and queries.

  • A Query List page showing all of the agents you have queried, sorted however you want and contained in a tree structure with branches for each manuscript and folder.

  • Tracking has been expanded and broken into two categories; query letters and manuscript submissions, so now you can track all phases of your agent quest and view more detailed statistics about each category.

  • An agent "Watch" feature which allows you to select agents and be notified if any user adds a comment for that agent or anything about the agent's profile changes.

  • Tons of content sensitive help, making it easier to use the system to its fullest potential.

  • So many little improvements that I can't even think of them all, but one that has been a big hit with the beta testers is a pop-up status window which displays a quick query status for any query just by moving your mouse over an icon. (Hard to explain, you'll just have to see it to appreciate it.)

  • Word-count reports showing each agent's reply history based on the word-count of the manuscript.

  • Genre reports showing each agent's reply history based on the genre of the manuscript. (This was previously only available to premium members but in QT2 standard members will have full access to it.)
All of the above features, and more, are included as part of the free (standard) membership, the list of new features for premium members is even better, here are a few:

  • Even more detailed search capabilities.

  • Additional agent reports.

  • Personal statistics showing the statistics or your own queries and submissions, which you can breakdown by manuscript and folder, and view as easy-to-read pie charts.

  • The ability to customize reports by selecting your own date ranges so you can view data from any time frame.

  • The ability to create your own custom reports based on all the data collected by QT2. You define the criteria and the system will create and display the results for you.

Like I said, I will release the new version Jan. 1, and will continue to add to it after that because there is still so much more I want to do.

Also, note that while creating the new system, I have been very careful to keep the user-interface as similar as possible to that of the old system, so users will not have to relearn a lot of stuff.

The site will likely be unavailable for some time on December 31st while I install the new system. See you then, and I hope you like it.

Thursday, November 22, 2007

Happy Thanksgiving

I wish you all a Happy Thanksgiving. I know, some of you readers may not be from the USA, but you can still be thankful, and certainly I can wish you well.

As for you NaNoWrMo writers, you had your break, now get back to work.

Friday, November 9, 2007

QueryTracker Theme Song

A QueryTracker user just sent me a link to this video (Thanks Lee) and I think it is the perfect theme song for QueryTracker.

Check it out at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8TLmpL2AzLs

Not only is it appropriate and uplifting, but it also reminded me of the old days (those of you old enough to remember E.L.O. will understand.)

Saturday, November 3, 2007

Critique and criticism






A question came up in the forum recently that I would like to address in a little more detail than I could there, and without the smilies, of course. One of our regulars brought up an interesting question. Why is it that when people critique other's work, they are always critical and rarely tout the positives of the work in question. Since words are writers' most basic tools, let's examine the word critique so that we all know what we are talking about.


Merriam-Webster defines the word "critique" as: To examine critically, or: Review. Pretty straight forward, yes? But just to be sure, what does it mean to do something critically or with criticism? Again, Merriam-Webster says it is the art of evaluating or analyzing works of art or literature. Okay, so it is all about reviewing, evaluating or analyzing. So what do we do when we do these things?


When someone evaluates your work, they are trying to determine the significance, worth, or condition of it by careful appraisal and study. Okay, I stole that from the dictionary again, but you see what I am getting at. They are scrutinizing your work and are looking for anything that might be wrong. Reviewing is really the same thing, so I won't give you another definition there, and analysis is the separation of a whole into its component parts. So as you can see, it is a process intended to study your work in depth and to see what is wrong with it, or determine its condition as stated above.


This is a difficult experience for most of us who write, because in our minds we have created something we hope people will find breathtaking and wonderful, and then when we put it out there for people to see, all they seem to want to do is tear it apart. They tell us there are too many adjectives. The prose is too flowery. You use too many adverbs. Don't you think a sentence to describe the moon in the clouds would suffice instead of an entire paragraph? There is always something these people can find fault with! I wrote that stuff because I liked it, you know? Yeah they know, but if you are writing this stuff for yourself and you don't want to hear what they have to say, then you might as well not bother trying to get published. There will be a lot of theys between your first draft and your first edition, and they will all want something changed.

And that is where your critique group or writing circle comes in. As a writer, you will need a group of people who understand your style and what you are trying to accomplish through your writing, but at the same time will not be afraid to tell you when something needs to go, because believe me, some of the stuff that you love so much needs to go. They are there to evaluate, review, and analyze your work. Listen to what they have to say, because this group of supportive, yet unrelenting critiquers will prepare you for the true difficulties you will be facing if your work ever does reach the hands of a professional editor. Don't expect any compliments on your turns of phrase from them, intrepid adventurers. These guys mean business. They will hack your manuscript to pieces and tell you to put it back together, only better this time. And then expect you to THANK them!! And you should be grateful to them, and to your critique group, because if your work has gone that far, it will be thanks to a group of people who were willing to risk the wrath of your artistic tantrums and spend the time and effort to help get you past the things you would not have been able to get past yourself. In my opinion, that's way better than, "I really liked your description of the moon in the clouds." Anyone can offer a compliment, but it takes real guts and effort to offer a well thought-out critique.


P.S. When I finished the first draft of this post, I left it for Patrick to review, evaluate, and analyze, and he critiqued my original work as being, "unfocused." Hopefully when you all help the writers in your writing circles, your critiques will be a bit more, umm... focused. And specific. But it was still very appropriate for the material, so I thought I would mention it. Carry on, and good luck to all you NaNoWriMo fanatics out there.

(A note from Patrick. Jason, this is much more focused now. I'm glad I could help, and I am always thankful when a writer asks my opinions and then does not hate me for giving them. Not that I am a harsh editor or anything like that. Right Jason?

I consider this a very important subject for all writers. Those who learn to accept criticism are typically the writers who improve dramatically in their craft, and those who give good critiques improve even more. Just remember, you need to be honest without being harsh. Don't just say something is bad, tell why it is bad and try to give examples of how to improve it. The writer, of course, has the option of acting upon your suggestions or not, but still you are both learning.)

Wednesday, October 31, 2007

The Latest QT Newsletter

Well, I’m a bit behind on this newsletter again, but as usual things on QueryTracker have been busy, and as usual, I am using that as my excuse.

Last month I mentioned that the QueryTracker membership had doubled every month since its inception, and that I hoped we could keep that up. Well, I was skeptical about it at the time since in order to double our membership in October we would have had to sign up 1,500 members. That would have been a lot of new members, and unfortunately we didn’t quite make it. But I’m not disappointed because we came really close and had our best month ever with about 1,000 new members, giving us a total of 2,500+ users. The data pool is also filling up nicely with over 16,000 queries being tracked.

These phenomenal numbers would not have been possible without the kind contributions of our Premium Members. For those of you who don’t know, Premium Members are members who have donated $25 to QueryTracker to help it grow. 100% of all funds collected goes to purchase advertising. This advertising brings in more members and hence more data for everyone. In exchange for their generosity, Premium Members are given access to some advanced features on QueryTracker not available to general members.


Blogs
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I recently ran across a blog that was so full of useful information for writers that I thought I just had to point it out to others. The blog is http://writesabouteverything.blogspot.com/ and it is written by a QueryTracker user named Deborah White. On it you can find information about agent contracts, book rights, query letters, and a lot more. It really is worth looking at. And speaking of worthy blogs, my good friend Jason Robinson has written a very good little article on coping with rejection. It is on the QueryTracker blog at http://querytracker.blogspot.com/2007/10/rejection.html.



New Agents - Guilty Until Proven Innocent
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I am asked all the time to add new agents to the QueryTracker database. I encourage users to submit new agents and I’m always happy to add them, but only if they pass certain criteria. There are a lot of so called agents out there who do not have a writer’s best interests at heart, and I do everything I can to keep them off of the QueryTracker list. Which means I subscribe to the guilty until proven innocent school of thought when it comes to agents. If someone proposes an agent and I can’t find enough evidence online to relieve suspicion, then that “agent” is not going to be listed. Unfortunately, this means that sometimes legitimate agents are rejected, but I would rather err on the side of caution and not list a hundred legitimate agents then to list one scammer. I do this because I feel it is my obligation to protect QueryTracker users from these scammers.

For those of you who have submitted agents that were not listed, I apologize for any inconvenience. If you have any evidence in support of them, please email me so it can be resolved.

So, does that mean you can be absolutely sure that there are no scammer agents listed on QueryTracker? I wish that were true, but sadly no. I say no because you should never trust any single source when agents are concerned. Always get a second, third and fourth opinion. Double check with AgentQuery, Preditors & Editors, Writer’s Beware and other such sites. And not just for legitimacy either. Check contact info and submission requirements as well. What you are doing is too important to leave to chance. There is no such thing as a one-stop source for agent information.



Success Stories
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I am starting a bookshelf of sorts. This bookshelf will contain the books of QueryTracker users who, with the help of QueryTracker, have found agents. So if anyone out there has a success story to share, please let me know.



QueryTracker version 2.0
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I am also hard at work on a new version of QueryTracker. It will be faster and easier to use, while still retaining all the features and abilities you have come to know and appreciate. So, if you have ever wished QueryTracker would include another feature or found something that you thought would work better another way, here is your chance to speak up. All suggestions, ideas, bug reports, and criticisms are appreciated and will be considered.

Please use this link to make a suggestion http://querytracker.net/contact.php?q=2

Thank you, and until next time, keep writing.
-Patrick